CheckeredZebra's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Pokemon Hoarder]

I read the reviews that mention pacing, and you said you tried making it faster but it didn't work.

Honestly just abrupt scene cuts would do fine.
Squirtle spit out his tongue too long, you could cut that by a second or two. Prof's creepy lavender town staring could've been cut after the first "Uh...professor?" dialogue line.

Example:
*Prof staring into space with music playing*
"..Uhh..professor?"
*camera switches to the Prof. The music cuts off suddenly, and the background behind him returns to normal. Prof. Continues staring for a split second before saying...*
"Wha- OH! Nothing, don't worry about it!"
*Flash returns as usual*

MUCH cleaner and retains the audience's attention.

As for not giving you a full 3 stars...the end was just too cruel to me for it to be funny or amusing. I just left feeling depressed and sad, which is OK for serious flashes but not in something I was expecting to be funny. So when it just became horribly inhumane my opinion toward the flash lowered.

Mosamabindrawin responds:

Yea I agree the squirtle scene could have been shorter. What you suggested though with professor oak saying nothing is wrong and dont worry about it wouldnt have worked though. Something IS wrong. He cracked, took the kid, killed him and put him in his freezer.

[Pi Ain't Yella']

Good animation, amusing art, throwaway "sure let's go with that" script. I didn't really laugh, but I was amused. =P

[LETS PLAY SLENDERMAN!!!!!]

For a parody of bad let's players, and for a newgrounds front page animation, there was SO much more you could do with this content-wise. I kind of smiled at him screaming too loud, but then the violence wasn't really funny...

Overall it was kind of a weird flash that I was expecting more from. It wasn't bad, but....honestly, there was so much more you could've done with this. D:

[Air Break]

I understood the joke and appreciated the animation, but it wasn't as funny as I was expecting. I liked the build up TO the last part, but the punchline needed to give more of an impact.

Now by impact...I'm not saying improve your animation, art, or delivery. That was spot on. It was the joke itself that needed a bit more work. I saw it all coming.

I would have rather the punchline be something else COMPLETELY unexpected, such as him...idk, punching his boss in the face and running outside, or suing. Just...something I couldn't see from a mile away. D:

Still, it seems like I'm in the minority. I see a lot of 5s and "AWESOME MAN!!!" comments, haha. And I'm glad others got a lot of enjoyment from it. But to me, this was slightly amusing, but didn't quite live up to the standards it was set up to have. (Front page Newgrounds, made by Riceman.)

[Zelda:Whatever]

It was...alright. I chuckled at some of the jokes (mostly the swag Ganondorf and the Side Jumping thing) but there was just something keeping this from being really great. Not that I really think you were going for that, but whatever. :V

[Everwynn Forest]

The art was amazing and the world you created for the characters fairly enchanting for the few words in the story. However, even on a children's level, there is not enough conflict nor problem solving. If you look at famous children's shows (Winnie the Poo, Little Bear, Aurthur, etc) they all have a bit more conflict in them. Could've easily added more considering they were hiking up mountains and such.

Aside from that, it's pretty good. =)

[Skyrim : Dovahbear]

Way way more interesting and fummy than the first, in my opinion. You started off great in the start, with the bear kinda slowly becoming the Dovakhin. However, it really really stalled when the bear sat in the bar for so long only for the dragon sequence to be a bit...short.

Bear getting drunk = funny, but it was a bit overdone.

Regardless, animation is amazing and I look forward to seeing more stuff from you =) I think you've improved a lot from your first one.

Bowz responds:

I agree, that part did get a bit sloppy. Thanks for the feedback!

["The Worst"]

Yeah yeah, I see your sarcastic vicious replies to comments, but anyway...

Great, great, great art. I was extremely impressed by it and I was hooked as soon as I saw the first few seconds of it. However...

Way, way, way too disturbing for me. Some people are like "ZOMG YES VIOLENCE" but to me, this is like..Gorn. Just too much of it without any justification for it, and it steps over too many lines (the lines being my stomach; I felt physically ill after watching this). I will never, ever watch this again. And for that, I can only give it 2.5 stars. The art deserves a 3 but I just can't give it to you.

I got no enjoyment from it and in fact feel a little worse off in life just from seeing it. It has, literally, degraded my entire life experience down a little bit.

Hopefully though, some day you can do something more accessible to a mainstream audience. You can argue I'm just being a pussy but damn, this is just too messed up. You definitely have talent/are awesome and all that, but Jesus Christ, this is awful in a whole new way.

Sherbalex responds:

someday before my body dies and i leave this earth i will leave behind the beautiful things that hide within.

until then though, its just going to be more of this!!!

[Dunsparce]

I liked it, and I'm glad somebody else finally used Dunsparce in something, but I kept waiting for that last punchline/twist, and it never came. This lead to it being very very slightly disappointing although it was still entertaining.

Everything else was pretty funny, though =P

[Zelda Uncut: Childhood]

I hate to be...well, another "hater" but a lot of these jokes were only saved by the voice acting on link's part. "EAT MY DICK" isn't funny, The sex jokes are only funny in small amounts (which was overly abused in the beginning, should've left it at "elf sex" which I admit was slightly funny =P).

Honestly, the whole beginning was just...trying too hard. D: And the end seppuku thing...also wasn't funny. Also, I'm not saying this takes off points, but what would happen if Saria AND Zelda were on Ganon's lap at the end? It would've gone a step farther than what was in the video and I probably would've laughed at him being screwed over twice. I saw the original ending coming but taking it a step farther would've definitely redeemed that.

But I gotta give this props, there were funny/humorous things in this and I can tell work went into it. I loved the art and the choices in sound/music were superb. But honestly, the writing needs to be worked on a bit. A lot of this was either predictable and/or "low" ranking comedy, such as sex jokes/underwear jokes. There is so much more you can do with this, but at the least you've improved a bit with more originality than the last few I've seen from you =) I do look forward to more submissions, I just hope you can learn from all of this and slowly improve. (Props to your voice actors, btw!)